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Cemetery Fog by ~AshahisSiltai:iconAshahisSiltai:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Horror & Macabre > Open


On and on they sleep
The graves of theirs have been dug deep
Eternal rest they have achieved
Their sleeping grounds the living keep

The foggy night masks my fear
Were it not for you I would not have come here
Beneath our feet the ground cries
for within it the souls long to be alive

The moon has risen high
The hour midnight has arrived
What shadows have come to play?
How long before light brings the day?
©2006-2009 ~AshahisSiltai
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Author's Comments

This is a poem I wrote a couple days ago, its original title was 'Fortunate D*ad', but I decided to go with 'Cemetery Fog' instead. If you have a better suggestion for a title...please voice it. Hehe.

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~ObsessedTaco Jan 23, 2006, 8:58:19 PM
Very nice... I like the last stanza in particular.

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~AshahisSiltai Jan 23, 2006, 8:59:58 PM
Thank you. ^.^

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It's the nice people who take their own lives.
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~araleith Jan 24, 2006, 9:02:41 AM
I like it, especially the end. It gives me shivers, but hte good kind. :) Once again, superb job, Jobie.
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~AshahisSiltai Jan 24, 2006, 5:16:16 PM
Yay.

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It's the nice people who take their own lives.
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*CrustyMuffin Jan 26, 2006, 9:43:26 PM
I love it. Nice use of dreary words, very emotional, and it flows very well! :+fav:

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~AshahisSiltai Jan 27, 2006, 1:41:05 PM
Thanks. ^.^

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It's the nice people who take their own lives.
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~ElArmana Feb 20, 2006, 11:46:30 AM
I really like it. but you know... 'Eternal rest they have achieved'
that's not really true, because after 25 years. depends how much you payed.
your corps will be desposed and another resident will come.
at least.. that's the case here:P

But beside from that really nice:D
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~AshahisSiltai Feb 21, 2006, 5:34:12 PM
*shrugs* It sounded right.

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It's the nice people who take their own lives.
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~schematization Mar 2, 2006, 9:27:59 PM
This is very good as well! I like the last lines especially, the emotion of despair and hope seem to mingle well in between the words!! the cemetery chill can be felt believe me! :fear:

Schematization

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If you want to be a psychological novelist and
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can do is keep a pair of cats.

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